Yesterday I met Pinocchio
— without the strings attached —
he sat beside me,
on the nightrain leading to
another place than here,
(somewhere too close to nowhere)
His slanted tie was resting
limpid, tired on his sunken chest;
his suit was stained with saw-dust,
and shoelaces untied.
Bourbon breathingly he
stammered in his smartphone,
“Darling I am late, soo much to do,
burning midnight-oil to pay our loans”
Cinderella’s lipstick on his collar,
nose was slowly growing.
He looked at me:“Excuse me sir,
could I ask for your assistance?”
I nodded (after all he was polite)
From deep inside his pocket
he handed me a tiny saw;
whispered (bending boozy air my way)
“An inch should be enough
to hide my little lie tonight”
He pointed at his purple-bluish nose.
Bending down his head was resting
gently on the seat beside me.
My wood-work skill is limited
but I can use a saw,
Evidence removed, he thanked
and shook my hand.
Remaining silent after that
carefully Pinocchio prepared himself
with chewing-gum to meet his wife.
Today Claudia run MTB at dVerse and she encourages us to include some magic in our poem:
– Where something or someone that/who is not real suddenly becomes real&alive
– Where a character from a book shows up in your poem
– Where someone suddenly disappears and finds themselves in a whole new place…
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December 12, 2014
I am so utterly impressed at your creativity with this exercise, all the little details create such a vivid scene
Ha.. thank you.. I had fun writing it.. would be hard to be a philanderer who cannot lie.
Orginality score high points. I love the child imagination with the adult theme. Take a bow. 🙂
Yes putting the childhood characters into an adult world is kind of fun…
I’m sure. 🙂
Fantastic
Thank you
Delightful!… But what’s he going to do about that lipstick stain? 🙂
I think with solid wood in your head he still need to come to that conclusion….:-)
Bjorn, Very creative and magical as well as a touch of reality. Dark humor and well written, 🙂 — Suzanne
Ha.. it was a fun one to write.
Ha ha….my illusions about Pinocchio are now shattered! I never would have figured him for a drinking two-timer. What next! Smiles.
Maybe Cinderella as a hooker?
Well, yes, that too!!
oha…if his wife is smart she will smell the sawdust from the fresh cut… smiles… cool write björn… as a kid i hated pinochio cause he always got lost – and probably i was just too lost myself that i couldn’t bear it….
I never felt deeply for the little guy either.. he seemed to gullible to me.
So very impressed with your marvelous morphing of fairy tale, morality, night trains, & tiny saws. After we finish chuckling at your catchy choices, your invigorating imagination, brother, the moral drops on us like the other shoe, bam; love this one.
Thank you.. I had fun writing this one.
Fabulous Bjorn, loved this take on the stories, and he didn’t flinch as you sawed it off?
All wood … his wife’s a carpenter (after Gepetto died) but I think she might be in the process of making a coffin now
lol…..yes there’s only so much gum will hide.
Excellent, I was never a Pinocchio fan either, I’m not surprised how he turned out :)! Very clever.
This was very funny – in a sad sort of way. Very creative. Peace, Linda
Made me wonder if there are characters where you work who might fit into the story in real life somehow ..;O) it never pays to lie..
Well this is really clever…..such a scoundrel!
I liked Pinocchio in Luigi Comencini’s version. It is the only one that really touched me. Now I see he has not improved with time. That’s a shame! I thought he was smarter.
Under an apparent spell he had no choice. He needed to have it sawn off following each retort. As long as it grew it would not be a problem which meant more lies! Chuckles Bjorn!
Hank
So clever! k.
I really loved this, fantastic.
Awh…. what becomes of our characters when they grow up…. enjoyed this… made me chuckle
Excellent, playful, yet serious little undertone – I too think that his freshly cut nose might be a bit of a giveaway…
A saw! You know, he’;ll be as exposed as Cinderella’s step sisters wose feet were trimmed. It’s too bad. I rather liked Pinochio.
Brilliant writing. Perfect pitch – you hit the “droll” note spot on and that’s not easy do. My absolute favorite kind of writing!
This foray into fairyland is absolutely delightful.
Great imagination…now whenever I will hear about pinochio this will come to mind….poor wife….
A fun meeting!